What do you think of this song lyrics so far?

I'd rather love myself than you.


Im so glad that we are through.


Get out, get lost, just hit the road.


I've got my own dreams, i dont need to be told(held for like 3 seconds)


That baby, my love cant be sold








It's a song about a a boyfriend who showers his gf in gifts becasue he is using her but she finds out and write him a song


The title is "My Love Can't Be Sold"

What do you think of this song lyrics so far?
very nice!!!!!
Reply:i can imagine it being a rock,R%26amp;B,or pop song, or soul


depends on how you sing it.





Though it's too rhymed. road,told,sold. And you and through its good beginner song but try to make it rhyme less.


like:


"I'd rather love myself than you.


Im so glad that we're finally through.


Get out, get lost, just go away(hold).


I've got my own dreams, i don't need to be told (held for like 3 seconds)


That baby, my love cant be sold."





then maybe you could do something like:





Don't feel guilty, just go with the other.


I don't need you for an( another but with short pause)other second.


There's something I don't shutter to say.If you know what's good for you get lost cause' my love can't be sold, baby.
Reply:too cliche. no offense but it's amature work.


it reminds me of songs already made.


I can name 2 of them...





- Mario Vasquez "Gallery"


- Jojo "Leave (Get out)"





parts of the lyrics and such.


sorry but it sounds like a song I'd never listen to.
Reply:nice but a little rhyme-y
Reply:sounds great u should put a slow guitar or bass solo to it i like it
Reply:what kind of genre is the song?
Reply:that is an awesome song so far!